NaTIVE English speakers, Please Help [10points]?
Question by : NaTIVE English speakers, Please Help [10points]?
Please check these four paragraphs if they’re free from errors and vague sentences. Please feel free to re-phrase if the sentence didn’t make sense 
A-We contacted seven agencies and two airlines to know the top four most visited destinations by the Emirati families, 80 percent of the respondent listed these four destinations: Bangkok, Germany, France and London respectively.
B-The flight hours also play a role when deciding on a destination. The flight time from UAE to Germany is 6-7 hours long (Kayak, 2011). Since the UAE has well-known airways varying from Etihad to Gulf Airways, that facilitate its passengers with the best service, the distance would not be a issue for Emirati families.
C-pricing would be depending on the family members who travel. it is a custom in this society that members who have a job collaborate in spending. Means, a son who has a job would pay the money for hotel or the daughter who has a job would pay for food during their staying.
D-In Islam, certain types of food and drinks are not permissible to consume like pork and alcohol. There are numerous restaurants that offer Halal food such as Alt-Byblos restaurant in Frankfurt, Habibi in Berlin and Sababa in Munich and many more.
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Answer by Anastasia Kass
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I’ve corrected a few errors which you may be marked down on if this is for coursework or an essay etc. This is the correct version. Hope I helped!
A: We have contacted seven agencies and two airlines which know the top four most visited destinations by the Emirati families. 80 percent of the respondent listed these four destinations: Bangkok, Germany, France and London respectively.
: The flight hours also play a role when deciding on a destination. The flight time from UAE to Germany is 6 to 7 hours long (Kayak, 2011). Since the UAE has many well-known airways varying from Etihad to Gulf Airways, that facilitate its passengers with the best service, the distance would not be a issue for Emirati families.
C: Pricing would depend on the family members who travel. It is a custom in this society that members who have a job collaborate in spending. This means, a son who has a job would pay the money for a hotel or the daughter who has a job would pay for food during their stay.
D: In Islam, certain types of food and drink are not permissible to consume like pork and alcohol. There are numerous restaurants that offer Halal food such as Alt-Byblos restaurant in Frankfurt, Habibi in Berlin and Sababa in Munich and many more.
That’s very good English for a learner or non-native speaker of English. But I will make the changes you asked for.
A-We contacted seven agencies and two airlines to find out the four most visited destinations by the Emirati families, Eighty percent of the respondents listed these four destinations: Bangkok, Germany, France and London respectively.
B-The flight hours also play a role when deciding on a destination. The flight time from UAE to Germany is 6-7 hours long (Kayak, 2011). Since the UAE has well-known airways varying from Etihad to Gulf Airways, that facilitate its passengers with the best service, the distance would not be an issue for Emirati families.
C-Pricing would depend on the family members who travel. It is a custom in this society that members who have a job contribute to the costs, meaning, for example, that a son who has a job would pay for the hotel costs and a daughter who has a job would pay for food during their stay.
D-In Islam, certain types of food and drinks are not permissible to consume like pork and alcohol. There are numerous restaurants that offer Halal food such as Alt-Byblos restaurant in Frankfurt, Habibi in Berlin, Sababa in Munich, and many more.
A – We contacted seven (travel?) agencies and two airlines to find out the top four destinations chosen by the Emirate families. According to 80 percent of the respondents, who listed four main locations, the ranking would be: Bangkok, Germany, France and London, respectively.
B – The flight hours also play a role when deciding on a destination. The flight from UAE to Germany is 6-7 hours long (Kayak, 2011). Since the UAE has well-known airways – varying from Etihad to Gulf Airways – that subserve their passengers with the best service, the distance would not be an issue for the Emirati families.
C – Travel prices would depend on which family members travel along. It is a custom in Emirate society for employed members to share costs with their families. This way, a son who has a job would pay for the hotel, or a daughter who has a job would pay for food during their staying.
D – In Islam, consumption of certain types of food and drink – like pork and alcohol – is prohibited. There are numerous restaurants that offer Halal food, though, such as Alt-Byblos restaurant in Frankfurt, Habibi in Berlin, Sababa in Munich and many more.
I guess this is what you were trying to say. Good english though!
A-In order to determine the four destinations most visited by Emirati families, we contacted seven agencies and two airlines. Eighty percent of the respondents listed the following four destinations in order of precedence: Bangkok, Gemany, France and London.
B-Flight duration plays a very important role when deciding upon a destination…
C-Cost would depend on the number of family members traveling. It is a custom…